my lyrics thread

i figure, there's a Skoogen thread, so why not make my own.
kindly provide some sort of criticism that i can use to make these better, because it does help hearing other people's opinions on your writing, especially when it's not the opinion of your girlfriend or friends. so please tell me what you think, it's helpful. everything to be posted are lyrics to songs i've written. to fully get the point i suppose you have to hear the music and singing as well, but i've none of that on my computer right this moment, so that will have to wait just a little while, assuming anyone's interested. once again, all input is appreciated...


DIVISION THEORY

Tell me how we got this far
With every second underneath a dying star
Within this moment I can't tell if I'm alive
Or just alone

I'm wishing, I'm waiting
I stood by while you were fading thin
I tried to understand, but didn't know where to begin
I watched you, I heard you
Then took my leave, 'cause I didn't care

I broke you in and let you die
And heard a hundred voices calling from the inside
And in this moment I can't tell if they are right
Or just to blame

Dear Fortune, I miss you
But this is how it's got to be
I'd try to let you in, but there's just too much to explain
I caught you, I held you
But I've run out of sympathy
I'm out of sympathy

(chorus)
Wake up, wake up
This is a try to set things straight again
Wake up, wake up
But this is not for you

Look in, I'm trying to forget
But all of this is an excuse for me to play dead
And in this moment there's no reason for the cause
Of letting go

I'm laughing, I'm crying
This tastes so bitter and so sweet
I tried an open mind, and what I got was an open wound
I loved you, I hate you
And now I bask in your despair
But no one cares

(chorus)

Wake up, sunshine, it's time to move
Wake up, sunshine, it's time to go out
Wake up, sunshine, it's time to move
It's time to take the world by storm

Wake up, sunshine, it's time to move (She was just an after thought)
Wake up, sunshine, it's time to go out (She was just an understatement)
Wake up, sunshine, it's time to move (She was just a crutch to hold)
It's time to take the world by storm (Lost in a world forever vacant)

(chorus)

Wake up, wake up
This is a try to set things straight again (This is for all the long nights by myself)
Wake up, wake up
But this is not for you (I'm not writing this for you)

This is not for you (I'm not writing this for you)
This is not for you (I'm not writing this for you)

-Mike





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weallgotwoodandnails

Message deleted on 2015-09-05 06:30:16 PDT

thanks for feedback.

i really don't like the "i love you, i hate you" part myself but can't think up something to replace it with that i still like. suggestions for that would be cool.

music is kind of loud, distorted, slow, and desperate, i guess. i really don't know how to explain it. it's a combination of the music and how it's sang. i just got a four-track and am working on recording things, burning them to CDs, and uploading them to the computer. if you're interested i could hook you up (though mind you there would only be guitars and my vocals, no bass, drums, etc, plus i'm still getting the hang of the thing)

but yeah thanks

when are you recording those songs you posted the lyrics to a while back?

-Mike





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Message deleted on 2015-09-05 06:30:16 PDT

tascam 4 track. hundred bucks. analog. nothing really fancy, and looking back i probably should have gotten an 8-track, because with the 4-tracks i just keep getting more ideas of things to put in, but i can't unless i do some snazzy stuff. of course, if i got an 8 track i'd think of more things and more things, and eventually i'd become a whore and add too many things. so it's better to keep it simple right now.

i really don't know much about the technical aspects of it. it sounds pretty good, but i don't have much experience with recording. one problem i have though is that when playing back a rhythm track and recording lead, i can barely hear the rhythm because the lead is almost always louder. but in the end everything sounds ok. you can pan things from left to right, which i adore. works with normal cassettes.

it's not bad, but it'd hold out for the 8-track if i were you. and god speed on your song.

i'm recording with a tele going through a Boss Blues Driver straight into the 4-track. it's not my prefered distortion pedal, but my OS-2 is at a friend's and i'm too lazy to get it. but i'm not too too concerned by tone at this point, jst figuring out how to work it well. but it shows up on the recording and makes a difference.

-Mike





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http://www.myspace.com/rosencrantzny
weallgotwoodandnails

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i like to do more subtle things. i think that that can get a little overdone, but i haven't tried it, so i'll give it a go and see how it sounds

-Mike





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http://www.myspace.com/rosencrantzny
weallgotwoodandnails

same deal as before, please

DISCONTINUANCE

Wake up, it's a sign
It's a signal, a cause
And it's calling out, calling out
Hang up the phone
No one's on the other end
Because they've given up, given up
Can you see me?
I'm causing the flood
I swim alone in the dark
Please take my hands and wash clean the sins I've never had

Side to side, open wide
Breathe in the air
But it's bitter on your lips and tastes like brine (like wine)
Taste the light, love the night
But no one cares
That it's bitter on your lips and tastes like brine

My tongue fell out
At the mention of your name
And bled dark on the sheets just like before
I open the door
But no one's there anymore
No one's taking the floor
For what it's worth, I'll sing your elegy
To the reflection of a cracked rear-view
Rolling down the window, the wind messes your hair
But you don't care
And you know I don't care anymore

Side to side, open wide
Breathe in the air
But it's bitter on your lips and tastes like brine (like wine)
Taste the light, love the night
But no one cares
That it's bitter on your lips and tastes like brine

(whispered, spoken word now... a breakdown, if you will)

And I'll write you a verse you won't here. I won't sing. I won't give it a thought as the words pour from my lips, just like the light caress of fingertips as they're slowly but surely tightening their grip on your neck. Be quiet, angel, no one's listening anymore. Be quiet, angel, no one cares anymore.

(singing/screaming begins here as heavy music kicks in)

Quiet, angel
I'll hang you from the halo that you gave to yourself
I'm the cynical saint
Rushing headlong to the stake
And stares down from the gallery's empty faces
And you pray for another conclusion
But none is going to come

-Mike



Post Edited (10-30-03 19:30)



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Message deleted on 2015-09-05 06:30:16 PDT

I heard all this talk of buying four tracks and 8 tracks and stuff so i thought youd better know there is easier ways to get your music down.

Im using cool edit pro.its got 64 tracks and you can cut splice and add just about any effect you can imagine to all your waves. (panning,cross fading, 30 different reverbs etcetc)
Its taken me about a year to nearly fully master the production side of things but now I even produce other bands apart from my band stuff and my own songs too.
Its worth about 500 us bills but you can get it free on some of those FTP things like cuteFTP(thats what i used) When your looking for it type in setupcep and you should eventually find it. its quite small as well(only about 15mb) ,hope this helps, its really worth it

Message deleted on 2015-09-05 06:30:16 PDT

thanks for the input...

The Fine Art of Falling Apart is off the EP "Loser Anthems"

i'd recommend, however, the album "Beautiful Midnight" because it was his most successful and in, my opinion, perhaps his best. but each album has a completely different sound from the last...

-Mike





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weallgotwoodandnails

i dunno what the hell those programs are. i use my little shitty 4-track. i might pick up some sort of computer recording thing after i have the money for it, though

-Mike





Go listen to my band. We're awesome.

http://www.myspace.com/rosencrantzny
weallgotwoodandnails

Message deleted on 2015-09-05 06:30:16 PDT

not downloading it

how much does it cost

-Mike





Go listen to my band. We're awesome.

http://www.myspace.com/rosencrantzny
weallgotwoodandnails

Message deleted on 2015-09-05 06:30:16 PDT

'i luv you, i hate you'

how bout:

'i luv you, but your killing me'??

or:

'your my heaven, your my hell'??

just a thort - tell me wot u think

DISCONTINUANCE -

its great!!!
not sure bout the lines - my tongue fell out at the mention of your name - sounds unimaginative. How about something deeper?
the chorus was great, realy puts the hole song in scene.
I like its absence - its realy light, but obviously incredibly deep and thought about and meaningful.
liked the turn at the end - it gives the song presence and meaning.
in total - luved it, pls post any other songs uv written, there gr8

hey, input!

thank you. the tongue falling out part is staying. don't quite see how it's not deep. only part i really don't care for a ton is the chorus, but hey

-Mike





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http://www.myspace.com/rosencrantzny
weallgotwoodandnails

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Message deleted on 2015-09-05 06:30:16 PDT

So we should be able to hear this song by, oh, August?

-Mike





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http://www.myspace.com/rosencrantzny
weallgotwoodandnails

Message deleted on 2015-09-05 06:30:16 PDT

A love song...

I just finished the music to the first song I've ever written on the piano (only took me three days to get it down). And I'm proud of myself, seeing as the only thing I could play on the piano previous to this was "Running for Home" by MGB. Not an easy instrument. Getting both hands in sync like that is madness. Madness, I tell you. My praises go out to all the good piano players out there, because they amaze me.

I don't have any program or some such thing to write out the musical notation on the computer, and I suppose I could write it out on paper, and probably will, but as of now, won't.

Lyrics are the difficult part for me this time around. I've got the melody for them all figured out, but the words coming out are sounding too cliche for my liking. But something will come about. There are a couple of good lines, I think, so something's bound to happen, and somethings are wont to do.

Go music.

-Mie





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Message deleted on 2015-09-05 06:30:16 PDT

I just started playing. Figured out chords on my own. Theory be damned!

-Mike





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weallgotwoodandnails

MORNING FLOOD

Belief in fate has been worn down
It rains, it pours, it showers doubt
I'm a walking contradiction now

Keep the world inside a jar
So the nearest light is still too far
I'm waiting for the tide to take me home
Where the wind is old

I've fallen captive to this dream:
A paradise of suffering
I waited smiling while it swallowed me

There are no stray marks to mar this yet
Hard to understand, harder to forget
So I'm waiting for the fire to die down
While the wind grows cold

I've fallen captive to this dream:
A paradise of suffering
I waiting smiling while it swallowed me

I've fallen captive to this dream:
Unchartered wealth brighter than it seems
I waited smiling while it garnered me so incomplete

Waiting for the night to come
I'm dying in the streets tonigt
I left my heart home on the floor
And watched all the extinguised lights
And as everything else is going away
This is going to stay

-Mike





Go listen to my band. We're awesome.

http://www.myspace.com/rosencrantzny
weallgotwoodandnails

Message deleted on 2015-09-05 06:30:16 PDT

I swear to God, I have no idea what you're talking about...

I wasn't even thinking about that when I wrote it, and then I looked at it, and I was like "Oh, ****. Well... Billy Joe's a cool cat, and it's not as if anyone will ever hear this anyway, so nyah."

-Mike





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weallgotwoodandnails

A new one... Just wrote it now... It's acoustic and folky and clocks in at just over a minute, but I could find nothing else I wanted to say, so here it is...

REDEFINING BLURRED DEFINITIONS

The sweet perfume of cigarettes still clings to me
And the air is fogged, so I can't see my hand as I wave to you
The wind is a little cold
As I'm surely getting old
Older than I've ever been, so obvious, this mystifies my mind

My breath is getting thin
Rasping in and out, it burns my lungs
As my hands shake and I can't hold on to this grudge
Or you can call it love
Or you can call me "Unknown"
Just never call me as I sleep and dream that I'm at one

Fall in, fall out
I have broken down
And reaped rewards I never knew existed in this world
Or at least for me
Yet still I cannot see much farther past my reach
I take a second, now, and I remember not to breathe

-Mike





Go listen to my band. We're awesome.

http://www.myspace.com/rosencrantzny
weallgotwoodandnails