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Lyrics to my new song...criticism needed.
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I like it... wish i could hear the melody
Don't you just love those flashes of inspiration that come to you and in no time at all you have something really killer?
I wouldn't change anything
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no but I love to add harmonies to other peoples tracks... and I enjoy writing poetry. I used to compose keyboard parts but that was a long long time ago.
I'd love to hear the finished product! You'll have to e-mail it to me.
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imbeciles just sounds good I guess. Idiots would sound great and a little cool (like imbeciles) too.
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becareful...someone might think its about them
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thanks for the clear up. cuz I thought it was about me and I felt violated
cool lyric man....i'd like to hear the song when it's done. One thing that I think might be interesting is if u added a spin off of positivity, possibly in a bridge or end segment. Not something that would make it a positive song necesarrily, just a look at the other side of things, u know? anyways, it's just one of my crazy ideas, so don't take it to seriously if that's not something you'd want.
~Tommy
"...now everyone elses heartbreak should be measured by my pain, and all the beauty in this world has spirled down the drain..." ~ J-money
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I was going to point out the "imbeciles" part too. And I like the idiots idea. But there is something about the line. I think the phrasing is bothering me. What do you think of "Why put trust in idiots?" "Place faith" dosen't sound right to me, but then again, I have a very different style. Overall both songs sound great. I'm impressed.
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"place trust" rocks man. I'd like to hear the recording of the song. It sounds like a good one.
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hey I responded to this thread first!
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well i responded third, and if that doesn't count for anything, then you can smack my sack and call me jack
-Mike
 
Go listen to my band. We're awesome.
http://www.myspace.com/rosencrantzny
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What kind of recording system are you working with here? It seems quite odd that you are adding the drums last....drums always need to go first I thought, to set the beat, u no?
~Tommy
"...now everyone elses heartbreak should be measured by my pain, and all the beauty in this world has spirled down the drain..." ~ J-money
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